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Hardcorehousefan
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 Posted: Tue, 30 Jun, 2009 22:24 Post subject: new song I just wrote "I Regret" |
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Im just lookin for peoples opinions on this. its based on my troubled years as a teenager and how I thought my parents were just gonna disown me cus they didnt know what to do with me so this is basically an apology letter to them. so let me know what yall think, thanks
It's called "I Regret"
will you forgive me or will you just deny me forever?
Mom and Dad, please don’t disown me, I’m so sorry
this is my letter of forgiveness, if you don’t accept, it’s whatever
I’ve made my mistakes, but so have you
my drug use has damaged us all, but is this a decent rationality?
I’ve got demons inside of me speaking to me daily and it doesn’t help
Overdosing I know is a close cause and a soon eventuality
I can’t help who I am, it’s just who I am, accept me for me
I’m sorry, I regret my actions
I can’t carry on anymore
I regret everything I have done
It feels like I’ve been outrun
everything I do I regret and to that I say I’m sorry
Will you disown me cause of my criminal activity, that I have refrained
it’s been a while since I have shop lifted anything, I’m now clean
I’m running scared, what if I was persecuted, now this is what I have explained
fighting my way through, trying to be the good kid but it never happened
I was never the fighter, it all rained down upon me like it was backbreaking
kicking me out and giving up on me would be the wrong move, I mean, look at me now
I’m doing so good, I haven’t committed a crime in a while, my life is in a retaking
I’m so sorry for my past, I won’t relapse again, I won’t steal again, this is a promise
I’m sorry, I regret my actions
I can’t carry on anymore
I regret everything I have done
It feels like I’ve been outrun
everything I do I regret and to that I say I’m sorry
If I could take everything back that I’ve done, I would
but my mistakes are my mistakes, everything from now is what I could
I was a troubled youngster, but I was smart too, only caught once
From now if I see my friends getting into trouble, I’ll than bounce
Please trust my new found judgement, I’ve grown since than
but
I’m sorry, I regret my actions
I can’t carry on anymore
I regret everything I have done
It feels like I’ve been outrun
everything I do I regret and to that I say I’m sorry
I’m so sorry Mom and Dad |
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| Posted: Wed, 08 Jul, 2009 19:16 Post subject: |
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| Did you write it to some music or just straight out lyrics? |
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| Posted: Wed, 08 Jul, 2009 21:13 Post subject: |
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| just straight out lyrics |
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| Posted: Thu, 09 Jul, 2009 2:22 Post subject: |
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| Do u visualise the song around them? |
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| Posted: Fri, 10 Jul, 2009 16:32 Post subject: |
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| I never visualize a beat but maybe I should start. I write mostly to get stuff off my chest. but I think Ill start visualizing an instrumental everytime I write now. |
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| Posted: Fri, 10 Jul, 2009 16:54 Post subject: |
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| What about the way it is sung though, do you have a feel for how that would go? |
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| Posted: Fri, 10 Jul, 2009 17:22 Post subject: |
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| when Im writing Im always singing it to myself. |
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| Posted: Sat, 11 Jul, 2009 3:17 Post subject: |
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| Hardcorehousefan wrote: |
| when Im writing Im always singing it to myself. |
the sample i sent you, does it fit with the way you imagine it sung?
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| Hardcorehousefan wrote: |
| when Im writing Im always singing it to myself. |
the sample i sent you, does it fit with the way you imagine it sung? |
the timin is right... it was uppose to be 2:30 - 3 mins long. but the way you have it planned out is different, we'll see how it turns out the way you have it planned. Im not a very good singer as is... so, the way I sing it, probably isnt the best. like I said, we'll see how the final plans come out when you have it layered out. |
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| Posted: Sun, 12 Jul, 2009 8:49 Post subject: |
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| Hardcorehousefan wrote: |
| Spitfire wrote: |
| Hardcorehousefan wrote: |
| when Im writing Im always singing it to myself. |
the sample i sent you, does it fit with the way you imagine it sung? |
the timin is right... it was uppose to be 2:30 - 3 mins long. but the way you have it planned out is different, we'll see how it turns out the way you have it planned. Im not a very good singer as is... so, the way I sing it, probably isnt the best. like I said, we'll see how the final plans come out when you have it layered out. |
ok cool. ive been at it a few times but shits been coming up and its starting to irritate me coz i want to get this finished for ya. got it pritty much planned out now just need to work on how im going to set out the vocals. hopefuly it isnt going to be too much longer for you man.
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